Self Assessment of your project

1.Unique character/creativity
-I made new characters in my diary and I include with story of main character. Also I made many creative stories in my dairy with many specific details. I think this part I can get A for new characters and new interesting stories.

2.Details- 5 senses
-I tried to find all of detail in the book and I putted mostly everything in my diary. However I think I putted many 5 senses for my specific feeling in my diary. At first I did not have enough detail in my diary, but I add a lot before final draft.

3.Narration(telling), Description(detail), Reflection(feelings)
-I think I organized narration, description and reflection very good. I started with very interesting story in my first part of diary about new happened in every parts of month. I putted narration with many details that make understand very easily. I putted many different feelings in every parts of month I wrote.

4. Clarity; correctness
-At first I wrote everything in my diary, and after I finish wrote my whole diary, I started to look my errors and tried to correct my mistakes in diary. However probably there are still many mistakes from my diary, so I have to look at it more.

5. Fulfilling length
-At first I started with my long paragraphs in every months, but I separated many different long paragraph and putted more details. It was very hard to made like short and specific, but I tried my best in my diary. However I think my diary is still very long, but I tried to put every detail, so that's why diary became longer and longer.

In my opinion I worked really hard for many hours everyday, and I tried my best. My detail and organization are perfect and I think I might get A- or B+. However mostly I want A+ ^^. If Ms. Guarino give more time, I am going to look for my grammar mistakes.

Visit to the Writing Center

Minseung Kim

12/13/2015

Ms. Guarino

English II (IS) - 2

Many Advices Make Better Work

In Cheshire Academy, there is writing center for many students who want help for better writing. In other schools there are no writing center or extra helps, but only our school has this great systems for many hard working students. I love this systems in my school, because I am from Korea and I am one of the international students in Cheshire Academy. However, many different international students still have to work really hard because we all make many errors in our homework. We have much homework everyday and we have to focus on grammar errors and organizations in every part of the homework. Most of international students need to check their work everytime, keep changing their work, to make it better and make it perfect. Writing center is one way that we can make our work better and perfect. I went writing center for many advice about my story of diary entry English project.

I went writing center on Wednesday and I could meet Ms. Swift in writing center. I met her before a lot, because I went writing center advice for my many essays and got advice from Ms. Swift. When I met her first, she taught about what is introduction, body paragraph and conclusion of essays. At first I could not understand very specifically, but from now if I write my essay, I always check my introduction, body paragraph and conclusion every time. Therefore from now I feel this is most important part to start projects or essays. Also in this English project we have to make our own character and include our character in book we read before. We have to understand all stories from the book and understand all of specific character. Ms. Swift told me that put many specific detail inside of story.

Ms. Swift and I looked for my English project together, and there were many simple grammar mistakes. Therefore Ms. Swift let me fix my own grammar mistakes and check what was wrong and what was right. I felt I become really better writer after I checked my grammar mistakes. Also we read it out loud for better understanding, so we could find my mistakes easier. I was little shy, because I read my own writing to other person. However I was not that uncomfortable, because she listen my voice and check my specific mistakes from my project and I started to fix my mistake with me. I also had organization problem from English project. I wrote very thing I know, but it did not organized properly. Ms. Swift advices were careful simple grammar mistakes and focus on organize my all project.   

From now I wrote many different style of writing, but I always make few of mistakes every single time. However I want to do better writing in my life, so I went writing center during my extra time. After I fixed my whole mistake with Ms. Swift I felt very comfortable every time, but I tried to fix by myself sometime. This is my goal that write essays or project and fix by myself. I have many mistakes all the time and need to study more grammars and more organization, but this is very serious problem to do alone. This will be hard and need much time to do by myself, but I am going to try hard and make better work.

 

Comma splice
-A comma splice is a type of run-on whereby two independent clauses or complete sentences are incorrectly joined by a comma.
Ex. Today I am tired, I will take a nap later.

• This comma splice has two independent clauses or complete sentences joined incorrectly by only a comma.
• 'Today I am tired' and 'I will take a nap later' are independent clauses and complete sentences.
• The two sentences need to be joined by more than just a comma.

Ex of correct sentence.

• Today I am tired. I will take a nap/ change to period between two sentences.
• Today I am tired, so I will take a nap/ adding a coordinate conjunction between two sentences.

Run-on sentence
-A run-on sentence consists of two or more main clauses that are run together without proper punctuation.
Ex. The boy showed us his tickets someone gave them to him.

• Between 'The boy showed us his tickets' and  'someone gave them to him' it has to put period.

Ex of correct sentence.

• The boy showed us his tickets. Someone gave them to him.

Sentence fragment

-A fragment is an incomplete sentence. It is missing one or more of the following parts:

Ex. When I went to the movies last week and I ran into a friend.

• This sentence fragment does not contain an independent clause because of the word "when."
• Therefore, it does not contain a complete thought even though there is a subject and a verb.

Ex of correct sentence.

• When I ran into a friend at the movies last week, I suggested we sit together.

Independent clause
-Independent clause is a complete sentence.
Ex. She wants to travel the world and see wonderful sights.

Dependent clause
-Dependent clause is a sentence that can't stand by its own
Ex. When the president arrives

3/4 draft

August 11th
     Today is my birthday and my friends and my all families come to my house. Now I am living in Korea, but I am going to America. I have to prepare to go to America for study English. Last year in my birthday I just played a lot and I was very comfortable. However now I am not that comfortable in my birthday, because I have only 3 weeks before I go to America. 
In Korea I have many different friends and I have a big families. I have my boyfriend Brian and best friend Seyeon. There are my best supporter in Korea and we played together and stayed together most of time. However in America I have no friends and I have no families. I am going to America for make more better experience than Korea. Now Korea is very poor because of after Korean War, so my parents decided to make me to go to America. This is one of reason that I go to America. 
However many friends and my families give me special present for me. The special present was American dollars. They tell me that America is rich country than Korea and they help Korea a lot, so my grandmother told me I have to respect to all of people in America. I learn big instruction to my all families during my birthday and I feel little more nervous than yesterday.
August 30th
     Finally today is my last day that stay in Korea. I think I am going to miss many delicious Korean foods and many Korean cultures. Also I will miss many people. Today weather is not that good, because it is cloudy, and it makes feel little sad. During I look sky my boyfriend called me to come out to see him. I cried a lot yesterday night, because I can not see him more before I graduate college. Also I can not come back to Korea, and I feel this is our last connection. We hug each other and promise to see after I graduate. My school starts in October, but I have to arrive college in September for orientation and for conformity college with many different friends and I have to prepare English early, because my English skills are not really good. 
First my friends were surprising that study English in America, because we can learn English in Korea too, but I am going to study in America. I do not have good English skills and I never been to America before, but I want to learn English a lot and become better. I think I will miss everybody when I go to America, because nobody speak Korean in America and I think I am going to be lonely. I pack my all luggage to bring to America and I have so many luggage, because I am going to live in America for a while. This is my first time to ride airplane for long time, so I am nervous a lot and I think I am going to pray for my safe trip. I am leaving and I hope I come back with my succeed life when I come back to Korea after college life.

September 2nd
     Finally I am here! I am in America! However now I am really tired because my flight was really long and uncomfortable. I think about many different idea in airplane, and airplane was very uncomfortable for me. When I come out from airplane my neck and I feel dull pain from my whole body. Also I can hear many noisy English pronouns to everybody, and many people are in airport to pick up people. However nobody come to pick me up. I think I have to use transportations to go to my college, but transportations were very expensive. Despite expensive transportations I used taxi, bus and train to go to my university. I have orientation in my college, so I have to move quickly to listen orientation. Also I want to see many different friends in orientation, so I can make many different friends. During I go to college I imagine many different friends I meet. However I just sleep and sleep during I take transportations. Finally I arrived in college and At first I went to my room. I thought I have roommate in dorm, but school tell I can use single room. I sleep a lot in transportations, but my mental is still very tired. I think I need to go sleep on my new comfortable bed in my dorm.

September 5th
      Today is 3 days after I come to America, I feel much better than before and I clean my big single room. I like my single room, but I want roommate like other students. However I am going to make many friends today, because today we have school orientation. There were many different American students instead of international students. I hear there are only two international students me and one more girl who's name Sookan. Sookan doesn't come to orientation. I think Sookan also have problem to come to college, because I taFinally Sookan come to college. I stay with Sookan's roommate Ellen. Ellen is very outgoing, because she have many different friends in college and she also have her boyfriend. Also she's very rich and want to buy many different new things for her room. We introduce to Sookan, and me and Sookan become really close because we came from same country and know our life environments. 

October 
     We have much time to accustom in college. Me, Sookan, Ellen and Marci become best friends each other. However before school starts me and Sookan were studying really hard for prepare class, because we know class work will become hard for us. We are international students and we are not that good at English. Actually Ellen and Marci are from America. Ellen doesn't like to study, but Marci like to study English a lot. However Marci also doesn't have many different friends, so she also want to make many different friends like me and Sookan. Sookan and me talk about many life dream and many different worrying. Sookan think she is always behind, because of her English skills. Her opinions were always similar with me. I think I am always behind, so I always need to work really hard than other students. Sookan and I can not get enough money every month, because we are poor and not that rich. However Sookan want to buy many different books, but she did not have enough money to buy some books. Therefore I heard to Sookan that she is going to do babysitting for her professor and try to earn money. I think is really smart, but I know this is going to be really hard for Sookan, because she have to study, she have to babysitting and she always worry about her money. This is very hard for mental, and I know Sookan is working really hard every time and everyday.

November
     Most of day we are working and doesn't get much rest. During 1 month we work really hard and try to make perfect grade every time. Instead of resting we are getting many letters from our families. Me and Sookan are from Korea, so our letter come mostly same time. Sometime it is Sookan mother's letter and sometime it is my mother's letter. I think I get little homesick. I miss my friends in Korea and I miss my all of my families. I want to go back to Korea, but for my big dream I have to stay in America and try to succeed as soon as possible. I see Sookan is crying sometimes, and I guess she also have homesick. Of course I know she can get homesick, because in America we don't have any comfortable friends and any comfortable families. However we can make comfortable families or friends. Me, Sookan, Marci and Ellen can be best friends and Inwish we become more comfortable each other. Me, Sookan and Marci work really har, because final semester is coming, so we have to make our grade perfectly before Christmas. I miss my families and friends, but I am going to show my best work in America with my best friends Sookan. However I am going to write letter to my family, because they wrote letter for me a lot, but I did not write letter for my family. I am going to write about my days and ask about their feelings.

December
     Finally it is December near from Christmas, and now America become really cold. I heard snow will be come during Christmas. It is also near from end of semester and our grades are going to come. I am little nervous about my grade and I am nervous about my family doesn't like my grade. However I am planning for rest during Christmas break. In Christmas me and Sookan are going to do something for many teachers and our friends. We are planning for big Christmas dinner and we are going to show and cook our delicious Korean foods. However I think it will be hard to make Korean food in America, because we nee many different main arrangements, but we can not buy in America. We think about many different Korean food that easy to make it. Also I am going to prepare Christmas presents for Sookan, Ellen, Marci and few of teachers. However Sookan also have same idea with me, but I heard she doesn't have enough money to buy all of presents for everybody. In Christmas Eve I heard Marci's parents had just returned from their trip to Europe. However I heard Sookan is going to eat foods with Marci and Marci's family. I can imagine Sookan's feel in Marci's house. She told me it was very uncomfortable and wondered if it was a good idea for Sookan to have come home with Marci. I also heard to Sookan that she felt really bad to Marci's father Mr. Gannon, because he talked bad way about Korea and talked about we are poor. I was little angry too after I heard this story, but this was true and I felt I have to study more hard and make Korea more better than now.

January 1st
     Today is New Year's Day and today is January 1st in America. Every countries celebrate this day for better year than before. Also I am going to pray for my families and my friends health, because in Korea we have many traditional praying for many things. However health is one part of praying, and health is most important for studying and for living. Yesterday midnight before 12 O clock, Sookan, Ellen, Marci and me met together and watched television for New Year's Day. In television there were many couples and I miss my boyfriend Brian who is in Korea. Also Kyle was here last midnight to came to see Ellen. They were kissing and feel loving each other a lot. We promised yesterday that we will eat dinner together tonight in big restaurant with everybody. I love to eat many food and I go to restaurant. There are many people who come for New Year's Day dinner. Restaurant was noisy and crowd by many people, but we have big fun with our friends. I miss my families and my Korean friends more than today.

Diary Entry

November 19, 2015

Finally I was going back to Korea during Thanksgiving break. I was very exciting to went back to Korea, because I missed my family and my friends. I packed my all clothes yesterday night and I was ready to went to Korea. I called taxi in the morning 8:00 and I went airport with my two friends. We could not believed that we could go back to Korea. However during went to airport we were really hungry, but there were no place to eat. Therefore we just ate hamburger before we got in the plane. I remembered in JFK airport there were small Korean restaurant, but it disappeared. Therefore instead of Korean food we just ate big hamburger. However I was really hungry, so hamburger was really delicious for me. I did not get in airplane yet, but I felt really tired already, because I knew how far it was. Finally we got in airplane, and we heard noisy airplane sounds. However first we tried to search many movies and entertainment programs. However there were many programs in airplane and I felt better, because I could spend time with this all movies and many TV programs. Airplane was not very comfortable, but I felt very comfortable, because I was going back to Korea. 

During Thanksgiving Break

     During Thanksgiving break I went back to Korea for meet my family, my friends and my girlfriend. During one week I planned many different things to do, but first Korea was very far from America. My flight was almost 15 hours from America to Korea. I decided very hard to go back to Korea, because this trip was very tough. It was very tired to go back to Korea and come back to America during one week. However I did many different fun things with my family and my friends.       First I arrived Korea I went to cut my hair, because my hair became long, so it was not that good. After cut my hair I met my whole family and had wonderful dinner. We went big restaurant and ate many different traditional Korean foods. It was very delicious and I ate as much I could. However 15 hours flight was making me really tired, so after dinner we went back to home and I had a big rest with sweet dreams. After two days my body became much better than before, so I called my all friends to play with me. Everybody surprised to me, because this was my first time to came to Korea during Thanksgiving break. However everybody welcome me and we went to watch many different new movies. There were many scary movie too, but I watched scary movie with my girlfriend. I really miss my girlfriend before Thanksgiving break, so I spent much time together during one week. Thanksgiving break was really short, but I had a great time with my family, my friends and my girlfriend. Also I hope winter break is coming as soon as possible.

After Read 'Gathering of Pearls'

Minseung Kim

11/16/2015

Ms. Guarino

English II (IS) - 2

After Read 'Gathering of Pearls'

When I tried to read this book at first I was surprised that Ms. Gurarino recommended ‘Gathering of Pearls’ for class book. This book was one girl who came from Korea and tried to study in America. After I read 'Gathering of Pearls' this book became my favorite book, because this book made me sad and this book main character Sookan was very similar with me. At first I could not understand why we had to read this book, because this book was just about Korean girl who came to America to study English. However after I finish read this book I was reminding my America’s life and thought about how much effort I had put in. Also I could understand why Ms. Gurarino made us to read this book because we had all ELL classes and tried to learn more English skills in America like Sookan. In this story Sookan could speak English and know English a lot, but Sookan worked hard everytime for her English. After I read this book I felt about work hard could improve our English skills.

When I came to America at first time I was very lonely and tried to make many different friends like Sookan. My English skills were not really good, so many people tried to help school lifestyle at first, but after few month my school lifestyle became better than before. When Sookan came to America Sookan felt everything were hard and difficult from her school, so many people helped her. Actually when international students came to America back then, they could not assimilate to the culture very well. Therefore many American students helped international students a lot, Because many international students worried a lot with their English skills also worried about communication with many American friends and many different teachers.

However when I was eighth grade I had to be ready for study perfectly. After Korean War many Korean people were busy to earn much money. However these day my parents had enough money to support me to study in America, so I decided to go to America in eighth grade. I had great supporter to study in America, but Sookan could not get good supporter. Because their families were poor, and they had no much money to gave Sookan. When Sookan went to America, she was able to be benefitted by this opportunity because she had received a scholarship and was removed from financial burden. I was really lucky and Sookan was unlucky. When I came to America in eighth grade, I was alone like Sookan. I was little nervous too, because I did not know anybody who were in America and I need to all by myself like Sookan. However before school start, there were summer program, so I decided to go summer program. I felt I could make many different friends and became best friends. My choice was right, and from now we became best friends each other. Sookan was nervous to came to America at first, and also I was nervous even I went to America once. However we became better and better, so we made many friends too.

Nowadays and during past days, many different international students or just students came to America and study for their perfect English skills. I loved this book and I want to recommend to many different international students for their effort. In this book 'Gathering of pearls' main character who came from Korea and could not speak English well and could not listen or write English well, but her effort was perfect in this book. She knew she had many problem from her English skills and she practiced and worked really hard for her perfect grade from her all of classes. Some people did not know about big effort makes perfect, and we could see Sookan's effort was perfect and became English teacher and author in this story. I loved Sookan's effort and I want to recommend this book to many people who wanted to become perfect.