Imagine Pobby and Dingan

   Kellyanne have two imaginary friends. First is Pobby and second is Dingan. Pobby is a boy and Dingan is a girl. In my opinion Pobby and Dingan have different personalities in their life. I think Pobby is very outgoing and always exciting person, because Kellyanne explained to Ashmol that Pobby love to collect small opal like Ashmol. However Dingan is one of careful girl every time, because she doesn't want to get interrupt from anyone. Dingan is afraid of many people, so Kellyanne try to protect Dingan more than Pobby. Pobby and Dingan have same age about 12 years old. They are very nice to Kellyanne, and Kellyanne can control Pobby and Dingan. However they always want to play with Kellyanne, and Kellyanne mostly stay with them or play with them.
    Pobby and Dingan don't like any people except Kellyanne, because nobody believe that they are existing in real life. However Kellyanne always talk about Pobby and Dingan, and help them. Kellyanne help them to eat each lollipops to both, and make them comfortable every time for them. I think Pobby is taller than Dingan, because Pobby is boy, and he is very outgoing person, so he play many activities with Kellyanne. He love to swing with Dingan, but Dingan doesn't like a lot. Therefore Kellyanne always play for Pobby when he ride swing by himself. Actually both Pobby and Dingan are looking very nice. Pobby has blue eyes with perfect faces, and Dingan has black eyes with long hair.
   In my opinion Kellyanne love to play with them, so she also imagining Pobby and Dingan every time. Kellyanne doesn't have enough friends to play or understand Kellyanne about her opinions. Therefore she made her own characters only for her, so Pobby and Dingan are Kellyanne's imaginary friends. Only Pobby and Dingan understand Kellyanne and play with Kellyanne. Kellyanne, Pobby, and Dingan are love to stay together and play together every time. Kellyanne can not control her mental when Pobby and Dingan are not with her.

Vocabulary List/ Pobby and Dingan

claim(n): Mum asked one night when she’d got back from her job on the checkout at Khan’s and me and Dad were relaxing after a hard afternoon’s work out at the claim.

wobbling(v): The noise of a car drove into our ears and a four-wheel-drive police jeep came wobbling down the creamy red track that leads to our claim.

startled(v): My dad turned around, startled.

figment(n): Kellyanne glared at me through tears the way she did the time I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.

rummaged(v): He rummaged through piles of rocks.

ute(n): One time he even took Kellyanne, Pobby and Dingan out to the Bore Baths in the ute.

crackpot(n): Lightning Ridge was full of flaming crackpots as far as I could see.

Mello Yello(n): “Pobby and Dingan aren’t dead,” I said, hiding my anger in a swig from my can of Mello Yello.

Mates(n): People who work or live with you. “I still say Kellyanne could do with some real-live mates,”

Opal(n): A kind of stone. "My dad would come back from the opal mines covered in dust, his beard like the back end of a dog that’s shat all over its tail."

Fairdinkum(n): Australian word for "Are you sure?". “Fairdinkum?”

Imaginary(adj): unreal, imaged by someone. "but I wasn’t crazy enough to talk to imaginary friends, I’ll tell you that for nothing."

Grub(n): Food. "She said they were quieter and better behaved than me and deserved the grub."

Fossilized(v): Become a fossil. "There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it."

Mammoth(n): An old animal liked elephant which lived in the ancient time. "There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it."

In-class writing

 In my opinion Pobby and Dingan are not real. However in this story many different character mentioned about Pobby and Dingan are like real people. In this story Kellyanne was Ashomal's sister. At first Kellyanne imagined about Pobby and Dingan, and she believed that they are real people.  However narrator Ashomal did not want to believe that Pobby and Dingan are real people. "They never existed. Things that never existed can't be dead right?" Dingan knew Pobby and Dingan are not real people. Also at first Kellyanne's father did not believe Pobby and Dingan. "Aw, sorry, princess. Did I tread on your fairy-friends?" However father asked questions about Pobby and Dingan to Kellyanne. Therefore after that happened father also believed Pobby and Dingan. "Well, I got to admit it was a funny sight seeing my dad heading out holding hands with two invisible people." Ashomal did not believe at all about Pobby and Dingan. His father got angry, because Kellyanne was mad at father. Father left Dingan and Pobby. Father became crazy. I think Pobby and Dingan are just imagination of Kellyanne's invisible friends. Kellyanne did not have many friends. I guess maybe she's lonely with no friends or have many creativity thinking a in her mind. I hope many characters are not become crazy because of about Pobby and Dingan.

Favorite Character in Once on This Island

   In Once on This Island, my favorite character was Ti Moune. I think Ti Moune was one of poor character in the musical. Ti Moune got in love Daniel. However at first Daniel also love Ti Moune, so they loved each other, but because of Daniel's mother and father he could not get relationship with Ti Moune. His parents did not aloud to have relationship with Ti Moune, because Daniel had his fiancé Andrea. Andrea was rich girl and Ti Moune was poor girl. Ti Moune waited for Daniel, and she did not eat, drink and only wait for Daniel. Ti Moune died at the last, but mother of earth made Ti Moune to tree, so she can look over Daniel. I almost punched Daniel after show, but I could not, because he is older than me! However I think both Ti Moune and Daniel acted really good in this musical.

After Once on This Island

Minseung Kim

2/28/2015

Ms. Guarino

English II (IS) - 2

After Once on This Island

When I got in Once on This Island’s pit band, I did not know anything about this story and did not know what I had to do. I was one of musician in the pit band. However I was not actor, because I was making music for musical. Last year when I was in eighth grade, I also played music of Spelling Bee. Actually at that time I was very surprised about instrument can play music for the musical. When I got music of Once on This Island, I was very confused, because there were many hard notes to play and there were many music to play for the musical. However like last year, we all practiced really hard to make perfect sounds of music for perform in musical.

    Although at first, I even did not know about story of Once on This Island. However we started to practice musical together and I became to understand the story. There was Ti Moune who is a peasant girl that hopes for a better life, and Daniel who had car crash. Daniel was very rich and Ti Moune was actually poor. Ti Moune found Daniel from car accident, and Ti Moune got love from Daniel. Also there were four gods to control the world. There were Asaka, Agwe, Erzulie, and Papa Ge. Asaka was mother of the earth, Agwe was god of water, Erzulie was goddess of love and Papa Ge was demon of death. Ti Moune saved Daniel, but Daniel forgot about Ti Moune. Therefore Daniel tried to remind Ti Moune, and Daniel also loved Ti Moune. However Daniel's mother and father could not understand Daniel and blocked Daniel's emotion, because Daniel already had Andrea that Daniel's fiance. Daniel could not have relationship with Ti Moune. Ti Moune was really sad and she really loved Daniel. Therefore Ti Moune did not eat, drink and move. She was waiting Daniel for a long time. However mother of the earth Asaka made Ti Moune very special. Ti Moune became tree and that tree never died and looked at once on the island.

    In my opinion this musical was very nice and very interesting. We had three same shows in Friday, Saturday, and Sunday. We were very tired and had less power, but we acted hard and played hard. I had the honor that I was one of the member of theater and helped musical to went well. Many different people of actors, teachers, and students prepared almost two month. Everybody worked really hard and prepared this show for long time. Therefore we could finish this musical very successfully. Maybe next year I think I am going to play pit band again and I think I am going to improve every years, because of many different show of musics. I loved musicals and musics and this feeling will be continue forever.

 

Visit Writing Center

Minseung Kim

2/27/2015

Ms. Guarino

English II (IS) - 2

 

Revise Essay in Writing Center

    When I went to writing center, I always felt not good, because I have to prepare to fix my most of paragraphs. I was very afraid every time to go to writing center. However for my better essay, I went to writing center to revise my essay. When I met Ms. Swift at first, I felt she is very strict and have many different creativity ideas, because she explained how to start essay.

    First, she talked about thesis statement. Thesis statement is one of start in essay and most important to write before organize essay, because thesis statement is one of argue inside of book, so this argue have to support with many example in the novel or film. However she talked about my thesis has little problem. She actually did not like my thesis, because of one of word selfish. However in my opinion word selfish is fine inside of my thesis, because I worked thesis for a while during class and during extra help time with teachers. Some of teachers told that my thesis and my argue direction is fine, but only Ms. Swift did not like my thesis. Therefore I did not fix my thesis in my essay.

    Second, she talked about summaries and analysis. Actually I knew about this before she told to me. In my essay there are too many specific summaries. However I did not put enough quotes and examples after write my argues and summaries. This was actually good point out. The sentences of quotes must support for my argues, but I did not put quotes after all of sentences. However Ms. Swift just want me to put quotes for support my argues. Also there are too many similar summaries in all of paragraphs, so she preferred to delete similar summaries and put more quotes and more analysis. Ms. Swift adviced many different specific plot, and her examples. Actually in my opinion she explained too much her own idea, but some of her advices were very helpful me to revise my essay.

    People can make many different mistakes with many problems. However we have to find mistakes and revise all to be perfect. It take a long time to find mistakes, and revise all of essay. I had too much similar summaries in each of paragraphs, so I could not put enough quotes and analysis. I learned that example of quotes are important to support my arguments. From now I am going to check my whole essay and check more mistakes, because I think, I might have more mistakes in my essay. Also I am going to add more quotes after summaries with my own opinions. I have to put more analysis too instead of similar summaries, and need to make perfect essay.

 

Revise of My Essay

When I wrote my essay, I always got many problems from organizations, thesis statements and grammar mistakes. Also every time it was very hard to write perfect essay, because we always have to find many different mistakes, tried to revised all of mistakes and improve everything in essay. However this time, I got many different problems to started at first of wrote this essay, but now I think my essay completed about 70% of the essay. From now I still have to work on analysis, topic with ending sentences and grammar mistakes.

In this essay at first I got problems to start with thesis statement, so I went to extra help to revised my thesis statement. I fixed my thesis statement to change more stronger with Mrs. Guarino. Second I putted more analysis in my essay. I putted too many summaries of Me and You and Southpaw, but I did not put many analysis and did not explained about specific my opinion. Therefore I deleted some of nonsense summaries and putted more specific analysis with my opinion during both of stories. Last there were many different grammar mistakes, because I did not go over whole essay from the beginning. In addition to fixing and looking over grammar mistakes, I could not find right over my mistakes. However I read my essay again and again, so after read many times I could find my grammar mistakes and I could revise my most of grammar problem I think. In my opinion I still have many problems in my essay, so I am going to look over and go to writing center to revise my essay. Also I still don’t have many specific analysis, so I am going to ask to writing center and makes more specific analysis with my own opinions.

Despite of fixing many problems, I think I still have many problems. However in my essay there are many strong strengths about my writing and weaknesses about my writing. I think my strong strengths are good at write specific summaries and explained specific Me and You and Southpaw’s main characters. Also I think I explained their relationship very well with creativity words. However my weeknesses are grammars and analysis. Many grammar mistakes and analysis were one of my difficult problems to solved and fixed. Most of people can mistake first time, but they all have to revise and improve their essay. In addition to making perfect essay, you have to spend much time to revise essay. I am going to read over again every time and try to find many mistakes and make most improve essay.